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Little eyes stare
Follow spiraling trails in the hollow
search for doodlebugs.
Loss
A hollow
where a heart used to be
now reclaimed
unilaterally…
My white pond
Tiny hand digs
the mound of fluffy rice
on the steel plate
Expectant eyes
gaze across the table
meet a smiling pair
Mother pours
filling the hollow
to the brim
With a screech of glee
baby fingers dip
into rich curdβ¦
βAmma, I have my own white pond!β
– Shail Mohan (March 2011)
Written forPrompt 161: Hollow
Nice. Very Nice !
I used to make a lot of white ponds as a kid π
@Ruchira,
Brought back memories eh?? π
white pond is exceptionally written. I wasn’t ever into poems but yours I immensely enjoy
@Anita Menon,
Thank you so much π
Psssst! To let in you in on a secret, strangely enough, neither am I into poetry! π
WOW !!! Loved the third one so much….I am a gr8 fan of thayir sadham… π
Is the first one on Pepper ???? Just trying to guess. π
@UmaS,
Thatyir sadam is my fav too! *same pinch*
No its not about Pepper, though it could well have been! *amazed at how it could easily have been* Its about kids looking for doodlebugs (kuzhiyaana) π
after second one ” A hollow where heart ….”, third one helped to set the mood right.
Thanks.
@Harshad,
Thank you π
Loved the rice one !!
too sweet π
@nimue,
Aww thanks π
Perplexed eyes STARE into life, the young & callow
beaten by the game of HEARTS in self pity we wallow
There is happiness and as much as you can possibly allow
like the simple pleasures of a BABY setting it aglow.
π 3 cheers to 3 Hollows. π
@Govind,
Thank you π
I enjoyed them all Shail..
@Ramesh Sood,
Thank you π
so many possibilities,
lovely imagination, well aptly expressed.
cheers.
@Jingle,
Thank you π
Shail,
I adore the first two.; Each so different. Each perfect in design and content.
Here’s Mine:
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/03/29/indiscretion-now-obsession/
@Kim Nelson,
Ohhh thank you so much π
That was lovely Shail. Nice takes on hollow.
@Shail Raghuvanshi,
Thank you π
Loved them all…there’s something very powerful about the second one! And The White Pond brought a smile to my face as I remember making those white ponds myself… π
@Psych Babbler,
Welcome to Shail’s Nest π You too had your pond like Ruchira above and so many others I guess! π
Relished all three!
Very beautifully done Shail.
@Premi,
Thank you so much π
Lovely poems. I still love making my own white ponds.
@Vivek,
You don’t say! π Thank you. π