Was it to tickle my fanciful palate
that I swallowed the sun whole
while still red hot… who knows!
I should have tarried
let the mellow ball dip
deep into the sea, and stop sizzling…
But I was a girl in a hurry
or may be was being a little cheeky
I gulped down the sun, thoughtlessly…
This gentle breeze that blows
(however hard it tries)
cannot hope to soothe my heartburn….
I guzzle dozens of chilled sodas
Bathe in gallons of icy water
Nothing helps. Maybe I’ll just burn, inside out.…
– Shail Mohan (March 2011)
Written for 
Words for CCXXXII: breeze, mellow, tickle
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I love that image of burning from the inside. This is really beautiful, Shail
@V L Sheridan,
Thank you 🙂
You can’t be too careful when it comes to the sun.
@Altonian,
Yeah I know! 😉
Burning inside out.Ouch! great poetry
@Sheilagh Lee,
Thank you! 🙂
In a far away land I lie looking at the skies
waiting impatiently for the sun to rise
and there was no way that I could realise
that the mellow ball had already met its demise.
Brilliant. They are layer upon layer in this one. It could refer to Kunti or an in compatible union, a couple of thought that sprang up.
@Govind,
Ooooops! I am very sorry about that. Now no use waiting for the sun 😛
Thank you. 🙂
awesome piece.
@Jingle,
Thank you 🙂
So that’s where the sun has gone 🙂
@Indian Homemaker,
😉 yeah!
Hahahaha, watch it girl
Do not quench the burn with water
If you drink the sea
You’ll have an internal tsunami
@Phoenixritu,
OMG now you have scared me! 😛
Where do you get these poetry ideas from Shail ! every time you end up amazing me !
@Ruchira,
I have no idea myself! 😀
Is this what causes heartburn?
It is like a breath of fresh air to read such quirky poetry. A delight in fact.
@Old Egg,
Haha! I guess swallowing the sun would! 😀
Welcome to Shail’s Nest. Glad you enjoyed reading it 🙂
I thought you had swallowed a whole red chilly and were describing your experience!
Here is my attempt with the three words.
Her soft wavy curls fluttered in a mellow gentle breeze that blew across her face and the tips of her tresses appeared to tickle her ears.
@G Vishwanath,
Lol, much more than a red chilly 🙂
Nice attempt 🙂
WOW !!! Thats beautifully written…. 🙂
@UmaS,
Thanks 🙂
This is absolutely great! Fun and bittersweet. Well done.
@earlybird,
Welcome to Shail’s Nest and thank you! 🙂
Seriously, you amaze me. The way you write. I loved this one.
@Neeraja,
Thanks a lot 🙂 It is mutual 🙂
Lovely imagery! Freshness…despite the burn 🙂
@Kalpana,
Welcome to Shail’s Nest and thank you 🙂
🙂
@Kalpana,
🙂 Welcome to Shail’s Nest!
That’s quite an image in this. Excellent.
@Anthony North,
Welcome to Shail’s Nest and thank you 🙂
Wonderfully written, a joy to read!
@Deborah,
Thank you. 🙂
Hot stuff here, splendid.
@Christine,
Thank you 🙂
Its always a pleasure to read your work…
@Ren,
Aww… thanks 🙂
Nicely written. It is how I feel now that winter is over; every little shine of the sun leaves me hungry for more.
@The Rusty Pen,
Welcome to Shail’s Nest and thank you. Ahh the winter must have left you really longing for the warmth of the sun! 🙂
How do you ever come up with such ideas?
First I thought it was a serious stuff , talking of Kunti’s experience , but later as I read ahead I found it very humurous , kind of ticklish .
Please enlighten me , what was in your mind when you wrote.
@kirti,
Well, it was written tongue-in-cheek. But I suppose somewhere in this there is something else too 😉
hmmm…. what was it Shail ? I too want to know . It is beautiful by itself . even then it would be a pleasure to hear it from the author .
@Krishnaleela,
Thank you… it is written playfully, but not really too 🙂
Stunning imagery Shail – we have to eat everything slice by slice – even the sun..Jae 🙂
@Jae Rose,
Lol, I burst out laughing reading your suggestion. Of course Jae, I should have sliced it up first! 😉
Thank you 🙂