Then a day came when carrying brevity one step further, I tried my hand at….. (Contd from here)
…..six word stories.
Who has not heard of the famous six word story credited to Earnest Hemingway?
For sale: baby shoes, never worn.
Wow! What a lot that says. Brevity at its very best, next only to the grunts or monosyllables at the breakfast table from men hidden behind newspapers mysteriously expressing through it, their need for more coffee/ toast and ably interpreted by their hapless wives. To be fair, the L & M does not fall into this category. For one I am running around making dosas and getting it to the dining table that it doesn’t really matter if he hides behind a newspaper or not. But the other more important reason is that the newspaper does not reach our house until after breakfast is over.
Ahem… I can sense it. The notorious digression has just happened even before the blog could stretch its feet. Isn’t it?? Getting away from the distraction of newspapers and breakfasts and back to those amazing six words with hidden potential to tell not one but n number of different possible stories, what else can I say but another simple, ‘Wow!’?
Yep, brevity awes me for the way it lets your own imagination run wild by leaving so much unsaid. I remember being totally impressed when I first came across this six word-er by Hemingway. As the un-anointed Long Blog Queen that I had been declared, there never was any question in my mind about my own ability to come up with anything this short. It just did not exist.
So when Preeti Shenoy’s six-word story competition on Facebook came up I read the updates about it and never gave it a second thought. But Hrishi sent me a message: Aren’t you taking part? Hmm… Little brothers cannot be disappointed by older sisters, even if they be ones acquired while on your blog journey. One has heard of brothers who throw tantrums and get one into trouble with parents and other elders, not that my own ever did anything such. Anyways, one simply has to live up to the expectation of brothers, real or blog ones. So, I decided to at least take a look at what was happening and hopped over to said page.
Plenty of entries were already in by then. Hmm… The prize was also something tempting: an author signed copy of Preeti’s second book ‘Life is what you make of it’. I might as well try my hand, I thought. Yet.…. what could I possibly say in six words??! A fat lot of good being tempted by books would do if I couldn’t come up with something. And then it happened. Perhaps unbeknownst to me the 55 word stories and the quatrains had laid the foundation for six-word stories to be born. Out of the blue, just like that (as always) it arrived in style, shocking me pleasantly, my very own first six word story:
He loved her. She loved another.
I was pleased as punch. At least I had been able to come up with one. I lost no time in jotting it down for the competition. Surprise, surprise! More of them little ones decided to follow the first and reveal themselves to me. I did not like the rest of what I came up with, not as much the first one (which still remains my favorite), but, what the heck! One could enter as many as one liked, so I might as well jot all of them down,.. That is exactly what I did.
I am glad too that I did so, because it is not my favorite one that won the coveted author signed copy for me. It is this one:
Practiced hard. Won race. Lost life.
I found this site, Six Word Stories, a veritable paradise for micro fiction of this sort. The ingenuity of some of the writers leaves you speechless. It is quite an experience to find out just how much someone can say with so little. Tweets at twitter.com pale in comparison! Anyways, tweets use abbreviations and sms lingo. So it is not exactly within its 140 character limit. But six word stories are a challenge apart.
Here are a few others I have written. Tell me what you think. Please feel free to add more of yours.
I wasn’t drunk, but he was.
She worked hard. He drank harder.
She bared. He collected. Sordid tale.
Puppy licked. Kid smiled. Life-long friends.
Angry father. Distressed mother. Grades announced.
Discovered well-kept secrets. Had fight. Divorced.
Empty backyard. Open gates. Squealing tyres.
He waited. She waited. Erroneous conclusions. (Of course that was before the advent of cell phones)
He earned. She spent. Fitting mates.
Read diary entries. Gave tearful farewell.
Beautiful painting. Very cheap. Hungry artist.
He whistled. She smiled. Love story.
She served. He ruled. They existed.
Rainy day. Hot chai. Spicy love.
Defying parents lovers unite in mortuary.
Sling shot. Tinkling glass. Failed mission..
Hungry kid selling peanuts for peanuts.
Barking dog. Open window. Sleepless night.
Wet road. Speeding car. Untimely goodbyes.
Open albums. Black and white memories.
Lost child found by police, begging.
He clicked. She pirouetted. Careers zoomed.
Now that I have tried my hand at restricting my tales to just six words, I am left wondering what comes next. Three word stories?? (I love you) Two word? (Welcome home) May be just a solitary one.. a single word? (Goodbye) Or perhaps nothing at all, just silence? After all silence says a whole lot more than words, doesn’t it?
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Short Lady,Long blog,Cool chilli.
@maddy
Good one Maddy. But errr…. who is this cool chilli? 🙂
Cool chilli: I meant your blogs
@maddy,
Ohh not me? *disappointed* 😛 Hehehe…
Wow thats some collection you have come up with…
Absolutely loved “He whistled. She smiled. Love story.”
Btw I have always loved the Earnest Hemingway story.
@Prats,
Thank you. 🙂 Yes, that surely is a master-piece from Hemingway!
“Short lady. Long stories. God!”
@Sankaran Nampoothiri,
Tsk tsk tsk! Sankaran now repeat after me, onnu, randu, moonnu, nalu, anchu… after that comes aaru. Where is the sixth word?? 😛
Meaningful words yours. May you win:)
@Kala,
Thanks. Btw, I won first place… did you miss that? 🙂
Great 6 word fiction! Didn’t even know such a thing existed.
Loved your collection especially the prize winning entry. Congratulations!
@Agnija Bharathi,
Yep and others like drabble (exactly 100 words including the title) and 69-ers (69 words excluding title) and then the 55-ers among others. 🙂 http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Flash_fiction
Quote:
He loved her. She loved another.
Unquote:
Here’s a sequel to your six word story, in exactly six words.
Love triangle ended in a sextangle
Regards
GV
Not too enamoured of brevity, by the way.
I love verbosity.
“Brevity, thy soul is what???”
@G Vishwanath,
Bob has answered below, ‘Brevity is the soul of wit’ and I admit I feel it is so. 🙂
Your response is interesting. My own would have been:
She married. He settled for another.
1. Loose tongue, secrets blabbed, everything changed
2. No good deed ever goes unpunished
3. Came home early, betrayal discovered, divorced
4. Hungry wails, warm bottle, secure childhood
@Phoenixritu,
Hey! Good ones. I especially like the last one. Perfect! 🙂
I like your examples, Shail, 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 but one I need assistance with please:
She bared. He collected. Sordid tale. Is it–A prostitute and a pimp?
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Here is one I can think of “He longed for her. She consented.”
Another: “Catching each other’s eye, they marvelled.”
Another: “Accidental love, growing momentum to unite.”
Another: “Holding each other, feeling contented.”
Another: “Caught by her eyes, imprisoned joyfully.”
Brevity is the soul of wit–
Shakespeare
@Bob Hoff,
I love them ALL Bob. 🙂 You are a natural at it. 🙂 And of your list too (like Ritu’s above) I like the last one the best! So so so very sweet and romantic 🙂 Way to go Bob! Just add another word to the third one. Or else I am going to teach you to count like I did Sankaran! 😉 😆 :O)
@Shail, thank you, why does a keen-sighted person like you wear glasses?
HRP, you have such a wonderful ability to encourage others. It is a blessing
on you that benefits others
🙂 🙂 🙂
o(*S*)o
@Bob Hoff,
Come on Bob, you came up with some wonderful six-word stories 🙂
Come to think of it, why am I wearing glasses? So that I wouldn’t miss the missed words! 😉 Hehehe… Maybe I should have been a proof reader 😛
1. Farmers look up. Dark clouds. Saved.
2.Farmers look up. Incessant rains. Disaster.
3. Farmers look up. Helicopter. Damage assessment.
@Govind,
Kollamallo! Farmers look up, but the scene changes each time. 🙂
@Shail, Actually I forgot to add the first scenario,
Farmers look up. Clear skies. Debts.
@Govind,
Sigh… that is also true!
Maid sweeping. Clean rooms. Dirtied mind. (A neat lift from what I read somewhere). 🙂
@Govind,
Is it from some story?
Exam results out. Teachers had failed.
ATM is broke.Can’t dispense cash.
Read blog. Commented. Beautiful friendship blossomed.
@Govind,
Love the first and the third immensely 🙂
Hi Shail!
Your writing still captivates as it did on 360.
I do hope you remember me.:)
With net connection at home now I can visit blogs banned at the workplace.
I joined facebook , met Guldi there , discovered facebook had no blogs , was disappointed & then found this blog of yours.
@rajni,
How lovely to see you after such a long time! Welcome to Shail’s Nest Rajni 🙂 …and thank you. So are you going to re-start blogging? 🙂
No more time for blogging at present but I love to read what you & other friends write.Really missed your blogs.
@rajni,
🙂 Always welcome. Glad to be re-connected. 🙂
Waiting for Shail’s next on Shailsnest.
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Regards
GV
@G Vishwanath,
Lol, that’s a good one! 😀
Dog bit, boy cried.. got rabies.
@Raj,
Too bad Raj. We sure must take this up with Maneka Gandhi! 😉 But what’s this, Raj has come to Shail’s Nest lured by telling a tale in six words??! Not bad huh? Welcome Raj! 🙂
🙂 mebe shall give a try!
internet connection severed real life lines.
love then tears, and then wisdom.
worked hard, dreams realised, vacant souls.
glad to have got the chance to dabble at this! 🙂
@vaidegi j,
Loved them all 🙂 Lots of potential six word story writers among us! 🙂
Lovely concept. Feel like giving it a go myself. A tribute to you: Rebel mind. Strong pen. Great blog.
@Anita Menon,
Ohh… thank you so much! That’s one tribute I will cherish, that of the rebel mind 😉
@Shail, I don’t think my pix of Jimi and Iis from Yahoo , but I could be wrong. I think I
did make a gravatar but can’t find it there so far.
Thanks for your continued help and support, HRP 🙂
How do you get “moving emoticon?”
@Bob Hoff,
Hmmm… let me find the link for you 🙂
Congrats Shail!!
Loved reading all of them.. including those of the commentators 🙂
@Priya,
Thank you. I too loved the ones in the comment section 🙂
Shail wrote. Shenoy read. We smiled!!
congrats shail!! 🙂
Thank you, Arch (5 years late) 😀