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While I weep…

I dug holes in the backyard

buried tiny chunks of me

and

over them planted shrubs

for you to see

Some parts are now missing

I am not whole

but

you would never know

of the hollow

for

the green leaves

the pretty flowers

will hold you in their spell

while I weep…

- Shail Mohan (Jan 2010)

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19 Responses to “While I weep…”

  1. Beautiful poetry! The expression is very powerful. Our eyes generally don’t go further than the leaves and flowers. Loved these lines.

    Me: Thanks Basanta for the lovely words of praise. Yes, sometimes we fail to see beyond the obvious. :)

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  2. From the depths of understood and half understood pains …. lovely

    Me: yeah… Thanks Ritu! :)

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  3. While some of my body parts lyses
    and the arid ground it fertilizes
    I am happy your pleasure maximises
    with my sacrifices that tantalizes.

    Reminded me of ‘Beatles’,'While my guitar gently weeps’

    Me: There goes the nimisha kavi! Now I am going to go listen to that song, Govind.

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  4. Very beautifully written poetry.
    Excellent expression.

    Me: Welcome to my page and thanks B.K.Chowla. You have a good blog page running :)

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  5. ouch!
    beautiful lines… as always, feels like you wrote down my thoughts… very well written, Shail :)

    Me: I guess its no surprise that I did, right?? I feel the same when I hop over to your page :) Thanks Shaili.

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  6. Awesome! so powerful… you are amazing in expressing your thoughts here.

    “…you would never know
    of the hollow
    for
    the green leaves
    the pretty flowers
    will hold you in their spell
    while I weep…”

    Simply loved these lines!

    Me: Wow Deependra, thanks from the bottom of my heart for those words of praise. Those are my favorite lines too :)

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  7. Can I look at this way ..a part of us that loves someone is buried deep down …but the beauty of that pure love is shown to all…….but then we weep dep within us ….

    Me: Mythi, each one has a different perception. Thanks for expressing yours here. :)

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  8. Beautiful ! dont know how you people can write poetry so easily.

    Life is such everybody sees the upper layer only, nobody knows about the sorrows buried deep within.

    Me: Yeah true for a lot of people I guess. Thanks Renu :)

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  9. Shaila those are pretty strong words!! The anguish seems to be pretty deep.

    Me: Hmm… strong eh?? :)

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  10. The pain behind beauty, eh? Really beautiful words. I agree with Renu. While I enjoy poetry, it beats me how to go about writing poetry so effortlessly!

    Me: Thanks Dreamer. Well, to tell you the truth some time back I thought the same too, and still do when I read others and also those lulls between the poems I come up with!! ;) :P

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  11. but…but…why one has to weep!

    Me: Welcome to my page Junious. You keep smiling!! :)

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  12. wonderful lines

    first time on your blog
    liked it
    !@

    Me: Welcome Sorcerer and thank you! :) I loved reading your 55-word stories. Will be checking out more of your posts :)

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  13. Goodness! what was that about?!!!! dark and beautiful,,,

    Me: Lol, love your reaction Ganga. Thanks! :)

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  14. You express yourself in such beautiful words, Shail. God’s gift, I think. Nice.

    Me: Thank you Sandhya for the lovely words for me. :)

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  15. Beautiful poetry in motion. You seem to write with such ease, a gift only few hold. I picture a couple of scenarios in this poem and wonder what inspired you to write this. Lurve it :)

    Me: Welcome to my blog page Shalini :) ..and thank you. As for the inspirations, keep guessing! Lol

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  16. but that’s beautiful!
    brought to mind beatle’s number WHILE MY GUITAR GENTLY WEEPS.

    Me: Thank you Kochuthresiamma. The second time the same song has been mentioned here :)

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  17. Profound and moving, Shail!

    Me: Thanks Nasir! :)

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  18. Beautiful expression! I don’t feel like leaving this page! Well you know me… :-) Love it!

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    Shail INDIA Reply:
    February 17th, 2010 at 08:53

    Yeah, I do! Thanks Bubbly! :)

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