I dug holes in the backyard
buried tiny chunks of me
and
over them planted shrubs
for you to see
Some parts are now missing
I am not whole
but
you would never know
of the hollow
for
the green leaves
the pretty flowers
will hold you in their spell
while I weep…
– Shail Mohan (Jan 2010)
Basanta said:
Beautiful poetry! The expression is very powerful. Our eyes generally don’t go further than the leaves and flowers. Loved these lines.
Me: Thanks Basanta for the lovely words of praise. Yes, sometimes we fail to see beyond the obvious. 🙂
Phoenixritu said:
From the depths of understood and half understood pains …. lovely
Me: yeah… Thanks Ritu! 🙂
Govind said:
While some of my body parts lyses
and the arid ground it fertilizes
I am happy your pleasure maximises
with my sacrifices that tantalizes.
Reminded me of ‘Beatles’,’While my guitar gently weeps’
Me: There goes the nimisha kavi! Now I am going to go listen to that song, Govind.
B K CHOWLA said:
Very beautifully written poetry.
Excellent expression.
Me: Welcome to my page and thanks B.K.Chowla. You have a good blog page running 🙂
Shaili said:
ouch!
beautiful lines… as always, feels like you wrote down my thoughts… very well written, Shail 🙂
Me: I guess its no surprise that I did, right?? I feel the same when I hop over to your page 🙂 Thanks Shaili.
Deependra said:
Awesome! so powerful… you are amazing in expressing your thoughts here.
“…you would never know
of the hollow
for
the green leaves
the pretty flowers
will hold you in their spell
while I weep…”
Simply loved these lines!
Me: Wow Deependra, thanks from the bottom of my heart for those words of praise. Those are my favorite lines too 🙂
mythili said:
Can I look at this way ..a part of us that loves someone is buried deep down …but the beauty of that pure love is shown to all…….but then we weep dep within us ….
Me: Mythi, each one has a different perception. Thanks for expressing yours here. 🙂
Renu said:
Beautiful ! dont know how you people can write poetry so easily.
Life is such everybody sees the upper layer only, nobody knows about the sorrows buried deep within.
Me: Yeah true for a lot of people I guess. Thanks Renu 🙂
Vivek said:
Shaila those are pretty strong words!! The anguish seems to be pretty deep.
Me: Hmm… strong eh?? 🙂
Dreamer said:
The pain behind beauty, eh? Really beautiful words. I agree with Renu. While I enjoy poetry, it beats me how to go about writing poetry so effortlessly!
Me: Thanks Dreamer. Well, to tell you the truth some time back I thought the same too, and still do when I read others and also those lulls between the poems I come up with!! 😉 😛
Junious said:
but…but…why one has to weep!
Me: Welcome to my page Junious. You keep smiling!! 🙂
Sorcerer said:
wonderful lines
first time on your blog
liked it
!@
Me: Welcome Sorcerer and thank you! 🙂 I loved reading your 55-word stories. Will be checking out more of your posts 🙂
Ganga said:
Goodness! what was that about?!!!! dark and beautiful,,,
Me: Lol, love your reaction Ganga. Thanks! 🙂
Sandhya said:
You express yourself in such beautiful words, Shail. God’s gift, I think. Nice.
Me: Thank you Sandhya for the lovely words for me. 🙂
Shalini said:
Beautiful poetry in motion. You seem to write with such ease, a gift only few hold. I picture a couple of scenarios in this poem and wonder what inspired you to write this. Lurve it 🙂
Me: Welcome to my blog page Shalini 🙂 ..and thank you. As for the inspirations, keep guessing! Lol
kochuthresiamma p j said:
but that’s beautiful!
brought to mind beatle’s number WHILE MY GUITAR GENTLY WEEPS.
Me: Thank you Kochuthresiamma. The second time the same song has been mentioned here 🙂
Nasir said:
Profound and moving, Shail!
Me: Thanks Nasir! 🙂
Bubbly said:
Beautiful expression! I don’t feel like leaving this page! Well you know me… 🙂 Love it!
Shail said:
Yeah, I do! Thanks Bubbly! 🙂
Nalini Hebbar said:
Wonderful!…very deep and sensitive
Shail said:
Thank you Nalini.
vIjI said:
Uhm, I don’t know if this blog was for me but it has struck me.
beautifully written!!!
this poem hit me where I live.
I’m really feeling this right now.
I feel like I’m at a crossroads in my life right now.
Am amazed with your creativity ShAiL………………
Shail said:
@vIjI,
Welcome to Shail’s Nest Viji 🙂 and thank you so much for stopping to leave such a lovely comment.
sreeja said:
This is powerful and lovely…….
shail said:
Thank you Sreeja 🙂