Shail’s Nest

17 Responses to “They…”

1. Shilpa on February 17th, 2009 at 11:24

   Why are you trying to cry?

   
   Me: Maybe coz I had enough of smiling Shilpa!

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2. Bob Hoff on February 17th, 2009 at 11:43

   Sadly beautiful, Shail

   Me: Thanks Bob!

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3. sashu on February 17th, 2009 at 13:35

   beautiful… got a lump in my throat readin

   Me: Thanks Sashu!

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4. ganga on February 17th, 2009 at 15:37

   Ouch…sad but beautiful! how do u do this, shail? u move so effortlessly between prose and poetry…always amazes me!

   Me: Ganga, truly no idea! Thanks!!

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5. bindu on February 17th, 2009 at 18:02

   Again ever considering writing a book or soemthing…

   Me: Not yet Bindu!

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6. Bubbly on February 17th, 2009 at 18:08

   (((((hugs)))))

   Me: Hugs back at ya Bubbly.

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7. Indian Homemaker on February 17th, 2009 at 18:28

   Sad they make me feel!!!
   How can pain can be described so beautifully>

   Me: IHM, wow thanks!!

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8. Indian Homemaker on February 17th, 2009 at 18:32

   You have been tagged Shail )
   
   Me: Have taken a look at it. Will surely get down to it soon. Promise IHM!

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9. Rakesh on February 17th, 2009 at 21:26

   Simply awesome…

   I guess you’re a wizard with 4 liners… I’m with One liners

   Me: Wow, thanks Rakesh. Lets hear some of those one-liners!

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10. Shaili on February 17th, 2009 at 21:42

    

    Me: Hmm… I guess I know why you are smiling! ‘Shail’ effect??

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11. PRG on February 17th, 2009 at 23:03

    I always have this doubt
    Why tears are mostly what you write about?
    Is it because it’s the best feeling we all emote?
    Anyways your verses always get my vote.

    Me: Now you comment poetically eh PRG??

    Thank you for the vote
    The feeling I best emote
    Is a smile without a doubt
    Yet tears it is I write about.

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12. Pallavi on February 18th, 2009 at 02:31

    Reminded me of the song ‘Tum itna kyon muskura rahe ho…..?’
    Beautiful little poem from you, Shail. Only hoping this is pure fiction and nothing else.
    Regards,
    Pal

    Me: That IS a beautiful song, isn’t it Pallavi??

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13. Roopa on February 18th, 2009 at 06:48

    Poignant and beautiful. Someone should add more synonyms for “beautiful” with the exact same connotation so that a gal needn’t repeat it again and again!!

    A suggestion from the insufferable pedant in me – a preposition “to” between “invite them” and “my cheeks” so that it is grammatically correct. Actually, it looks like a typo from you. Or you can use other words like “surrender them,” “give them,” “furnish them,” “supply them,” (okay, time to stop the boring rant) etc.

    Me: Roopa, now now don’t get carried away! Thanks awfully!! Actually, the line is ‘I invite them to smudge my cheeks’ re-arranged. Poetic license?? ‘I invite them ‘to’ my cheeks to smudge’ doesn’t convey the same feeling somehow. Hmm… but ’surrender them’ sounds good. ‘I surrender them my cheeks to smudge’ has a better feel to it. Thanks Roopa. I really appreciate your comment. As you know (did you??) I am only an Economics student!

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14. Chirag on February 18th, 2009 at 12:17

    They cleanse your soul.

    Me: Yes they do Chirag.

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15. Rhett on February 18th, 2009 at 12:51

    Hey, nicely written. Liked it. I liked the allusion you made instead of wording out the word, ‘tears’. A word too tender to be worded, innit?

    PS Do you use facebook? If no, then must you not?

    Me: Thank you Rhett. Sometimes you can get the result without the use of the word itself. Right??
    I am on FB.

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16. balvinder on February 18th, 2009 at 19:32

    Oh!! what a way to say some thing so deep so meaningful in so few words. Hats off.
    
    Me: Balvinder, thanks for that unrestrained praise. You are kind.

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17. J P Joshi on February 21st, 2009 at 23:20

    You captured an emotion, and its aftermath, that each one of us humans has experienced some time in life, in so few words. Brilliant and so true too!!!!

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