At the stroke of midnight, the skies parted and golden rays shone upon the arid land lighting it up like day, instantly transforming the barrenness into a verdant paradise.
The grass beneath their feet felt like velvet, not that they, children of the barren lands, knew what velvet was. Their feet had only walked the gritty sands and the occasional thorns that littered their path.
Now, feeling the soft, moist grass with the burning soles of their feet, they marvelled at its lushness. The canopy of green leaves above their heads was a cooling sight to their sore eyes. They could hear the gentle flutter of wings and the sweet cries of birds hidden from view in the thick foliage. The murmur of flowing water drew their eyes to the beautiful sight of a crystal clear stream gushing forth through shrubbery and finding its way through boulders strewn around. The air was moist. It soothed their parched skin, moisturising it as it blew. They gulped it greedily, savouring the cool feeling. The fragrance of flowers it carried filled them with hope for tomorrow.
Then, just as suddenly, the skies closed, locking the golden rays away.
Day had turned back to night. In the sudden darkness, their eyes hungrily searched for the trees of their longing, the stream of their dreams. But the harsh sand beneath their blistered feet told them the true story. It had all been just an illusion. They were still children of the barren lands, with nowhere to go. Hope for them was the certainty of the sound of beating wings of circling vultures the imminent dawn would bring. In silence they waited for their deliverance….
Prompt: Your post this week should start with, ‘At the stroke of midnight…’
This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda
vishalbheeroo said:
Mesmerizing story Shail. Beautifully told:)
shail said:
Thanks Vishal 🙂
Proactive Indian said:
Lovey story. Superb narration! You’ve created an audio-visual experience using only words!!
Proactive Indian said:
The first word should have been ‘Lovely’. Sorry for the typo.
shail said:
Thanks for the appreciation 🙂
phoenixritu said:
You paint pictures with your words
shail said:
Aww, thanks Ritu 😀
mahabore said:
Nice story, and just like all the other commenters have told, you have the gift of painting pictures with just words…awesome post 🙂
shail said:
Wow, thanks for that comment 🙂
Roshan Radhakrishnan said:
woah!! This is miles better than any other take on the WOW contest I have seen. Brilliantly depicted… every word in the comments above me is absolutely true. Mesmerizing – superb narration – paint pictures with words
shail said:
Your first visit? Welcome to Shail’s Nest, Roshan. And wow, wow! Thanks for the appreciation 🙂
Sunil said:
Brilliantly crafted story..
shail said:
Thanks, Sunil 🙂
Jyothi Nair said:
Beautifully written. Loved it. 🙂
shail said:
Thank you, Jyothi 🙂
asteria said:
I loved the imagery!!
shail said:
🙂
UmaS said:
Such play of words, for the given prompt !!! How do you do it Shail ???
Lovely 🙂
shail said:
No idea Uma! I just saw this picture when I read the prompt 🙂
Amit said:
It was vivid. I saw everything.
shail said:
😀
sridevi1974 said:
Poetic and picturesque , you brought out the pathos so well 🙂
shail said:
Thanks, Sri 🙂
meenamenon said:
The story of India?
shail said:
Is that how you see it? 🙂
afshan18 said:
how can u write so visualising posts ? 🙂
applause from me
shail said:
Danke, Afshan 🙂
subzeroricha said:
Well I moved with your imagination, whatever you wrote helped me feel the words.. A lovely post and ofcourse it wowed us 🙂
Richa
shail said:
Wow, thanks Richa 😀
rainbowhues23 said:
Beautiful imagination and the way the post has been drawn. In the end, it made me sad though 😦
shail said:
Thanks, Kajal. Maybe something better will come their way in the morning. Who knows? 🙂
Random Musings by Swati said:
Beautiful and touching indeed!
shail said:
Thanks, Swati 🙂
Santulan said:
I was thinking a bomb might go off, but then this is wonderful twist too 😀
shail said:
Huh? But why bomb?!
Indian Homemaker said:
Awesome!!! How do you think up such stories?!
shail said:
😀 Thanks IHM.
Corinne Rodrigues said:
An absolute feast for the senses, Shail!
shail said:
Glad you think so, Corinne. Thanks 🙂
ddeepa said:
Oh Gosh. You write as if you were right there. Beautiful!
shail said:
I was there, Deepa. Thanks 🙂
preetilata said:
This was wonderful. I was lost in your narration and i could actually visualize everything.
I wish no one has to live such a tragic life.
shail said:
Thanks Preetilata. Yes, maybe some day no one will have to.
Neera said:
Pure visualisation for me. You write so well Shail!
shail said:
Welcome to Shail’s Nest, Neera. Thank you for the appreciation 🙂