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I was born

March 17, 2013 4:32 pm

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I was formless and ethereal; floating on the fringes, elusive.

I made you restless. Was I a memory, a fantasy, a dream?

You tossed and turned in your sleep, were lost to the world in your waking hours. Your longing to make me yours became your only goal.

One day, when I assumed you were inattentive, I came tantalisingly close. Your alert spidery arms caught and dragged me in.

I was examined thoroughly, washed clean to reveal my essence, dressed up to enhance inherent qualities, and presented to all.

You had given birth to your thought and, I was born.

Written for 100 Words On Saturday 6 Prompt : I WAS BORN

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30 Responses to “I was born”

  1. 🙂 Love how you play with ideas and words… love the parts that I understand, knowing if I read it again, I might interpret it differently, maybe not even how you intended it 🙂

    By Indian Homemaker on March 17, 2013 at 6:38 pm

    1. Thanks IHM. I meant it to be an idea, a thought that torments which you are finally able to see and eventually write. But it can be read in other ways too I guess. 🙂

      By shail on March 18, 2013 at 9:48 am

  2. Awesome! Loved the play of words.

    By janu on March 17, 2013 at 7:18 pm

    1. Thank you Janu 🙂

      By shail on March 18, 2013 at 9:45 am

  3. Oh I love it! 🙂

    By perspectivesandprejudices on March 17, 2013 at 7:35 pm

    1. Thank you PaP 🙂

      By shail on March 18, 2013 at 9:45 am

  4. I can relate to so many things with just these few sentences!

    By Zarine Mohideen on March 18, 2013 at 6:51 am

    1. Thank you Zarine 🙂

      By shail on March 18, 2013 at 9:35 am

  5. Wonderfully penned!!

    By anoveldiary on March 18, 2013 at 7:54 am

    1. Thanks Akila 🙂

      By shail on March 18, 2013 at 9:33 am

  6. Beautifully put !! 🙂

    By Punam on March 18, 2013 at 7:58 am

    1. Thank you Punam 🙂

      By shail on March 18, 2013 at 9:33 am

  7. I read it as

    You had given birth to your thought and, I was born.

    By Santulan on March 18, 2013 at 8:56 am

    1. Errr…. isn’t that what I wrote? *puzzled*

      By shail on March 18, 2013 at 9:31 am

      1. You wrote:

        You had given birth to your thought and, **I was born**

        I read:

        You had given birth to your thought and, **I** was born

        By Santulan on March 18, 2013 at 9:34 am

        1. Ahh ok 🙂 My emphasis was on the ‘born’ and ‘I’ equally 🙂

          By shail on March 18, 2013 at 9:39 am

  8. This is so so beautiful Shail, really! And in 100 words, marvelous!

    By Rachna on March 18, 2013 at 10:37 am

  9. loved it.. every time i re-read, i interpreted it differently..

    By ashreyamom on March 18, 2013 at 2:20 pm

  10. You gave birth to something wonderful – but then you always do, Shail! I love how you played with this prompt -to trace the genesis of a thought. I must tell you, how thrilled I am to have you link up on this. 🙂

    By Corinne Rodrigues on March 18, 2013 at 4:42 pm

  11. I have no words to tell you how much I loved this ! wonderful play of word .. wonderful imagination .. superb superb simply superb !

    By Ruchira on March 18, 2013 at 5:10 pm

  12. There’s something so seductive about writing. And your piece really draws on that metaphor Of writing as a seduction of words!! Who would have thought …?! So absolutely beautiful

    By crunch on March 18, 2013 at 7:35 pm

  13. The hide-n-seek with thoughts and ideas – we are aware of their existence but they take some time to manifest. And then they are all ours. What a lovely way to describe that experience! Enjoyed every word.

    By Bindu on March 19, 2013 at 12:22 am

  14. beautifully written !!

    By G Angela on March 19, 2013 at 2:19 pm

    1. Thank you and welcome to Shail’s Nest 🙂

      By shail on March 19, 2013 at 2:46 pm

  15. very, very nice ~ abstract, filled with a lyricism that i so enjoyed 🙂

    By prema on March 19, 2013 at 9:08 pm

    1. Thank you Prema 🙂

      By shail on March 19, 2013 at 9:14 pm

  16. Loved it! While I agree with others that it can be interpreted in so many ways, I am guessing you wrote about a thought turning into a book. Right? No?

    Gah! In any case, this is a masterpiece 🙂

    By celestialrays on March 21, 2013 at 1:36 pm

    1. You are right! 🙂 Thank you so much 🙂

      By shail on March 21, 2013 at 4:07 pm

  17. WowWowWow!!!! Don’t I just love how you take those random words and ideas and make poetry out of it! Bea-yuuu-tifullll! And it’s like IHM has said: each time you read it, you find another way of looking at it! May more thoughts be re-defined and re-essenced with you inimitable touch!

    By Usha Pisharody on March 26, 2013 at 8:15 pm

    1. I am floored by your comment, Usha 🙂 Thank you!

      By shail on March 26, 2013 at 8:44 pm

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