How??

Last night I cut away a part of me

That I may face the morrow

I washed the blood off so none would know

Then how did the morn dawn drenched??

- Shail Mohan (March 2009)

19 Responses to “How??”

  1. It is often the flood
    of that colourless blood
    which we call silent tears
    that will dissolve all our fears

    Me:
    Smiles they want not tears
    And what’s mine is only fears
    As I contain the flood
    Of that colorless blood.

    Sorry PRG. I borrowed a line from you! :)

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  2. B.E.A.U.T.I.F.U.L :)

    Me:
    T.H.A.N.K. Y.O.U. Sashu! :)

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  3. wonderful !

    Me: Thanks Dhiren!

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  4. Hurts! And how! But it heals too, when the tears drench, and the pain flows out!

    Me: Yeah, when the tears flow out, yes! :)

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  5. This is a poetic 55-er. Many couldn’t succeed when it was introduced but Shail I guess you would have been a winner with your soulful words.

    Me: Was there a poetic 55-er introduced?? Never knew of that. :)

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  6. Hello. Long time girl.

    Well written like always. liked it!

    Rhett

    Me: Yeah Rhett, long time! Thanks!

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  7. Lovely!! No more words..

    Me: Thanks so much Biju!

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  8. my!! that had an eerie touch to it. brought in a chill!! :)

    Me: Well, it is always painful cuting off a part of you! :)

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  9. Lovely.

    Me: Thanks IHM

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  10. Beautiful!touches a chord somewhere inside…

    Usha has said it beautifully…

    most of the time I have nothing to add coz you say it all so beautifully…so I just lurk and read :D

    Me: Indyeah, thats quite a compliment. Thank you! Keep lurking and commenting in between! :)

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  11. When Pain is held within
    And tears stay in unseen pots
    Nature decides it needs to cry
    And Rain drenches the Dawn.

    :) .. Beautifully done Dear Shailji.

    Me:
    Laden clouds weighed down
    Await the Western Wind to blow
    Without its caressing touch
    How can the tears flow??

    Thanks Rashmi! :)

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  12. Little do we realize that the morn dawn is just a lighter version, an extrapolation, an alter-ego of the night… :)

    Me: Nikhil, that’s a point!! :)

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  13. Really bloody nice ;-)

    Me: Pallavi, you are bloody generous! :)

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  14. Lovely Shail…chilling too, as someone has put it…have been out of my online world for quite some time…got a lot of reading to do :)

    Me: It always is when you are cutting away a part of yourself Ganga. :) Thanks! I myself have not been around as much as I usd to be. Have been travelling and will be doing so for some more time.

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  15. like always:wonderful !

    Me: Thanks and hugs Isabel!

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  16. Where the hell do you get such stuff??! Awesome

    Me: The feeling is mutual Ritu. Thats what I think when I read what you write! :D

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  17. Long time
    Lovely words

    Me: Yep, long time Shilpa! Thanks!

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  18. Nice, nice, nice! This one I liked. :)

    Me: Thanks OJ! :)

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  19. Shail, when you are so good at this then you simply must try this one too, guess and win the 55 Words Fiction Correct Guess Award

    http://indianhomemaker.wordpress.com/2009/04/11/55-words-she-waited-to-be-alone/

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