You knew all the right codes
To unlock padlocked chests
Exposed, in turns I smolder and shiver
As elements wreak havoc in sweet revenge.
- Shail Mohan ( April 2009)
Shail's Nest
Where fingers tap dance…
You knew all the right codes
To unlock padlocked chests
Exposed, in turns I smolder and shiver
As elements wreak havoc in sweet revenge.
- Shail Mohan ( April 2009)
What a wonderful feeling that would be!!
Me: I cannot believe this, Maddy decided to comment after all! Thank you!
Now that is a wonderfully pithy and complete description of passion
Me: Thanks Ritu.
Wonderfully intense!
A little nit-picking: (1) ‘all’ may not be necessary in Line 1 (2) Is it ‘wreck’ instead of ‘wreak’?
Cheers…
Me: Thanks Pal. It is ‘wreak’ not wreck.
Shail, you do know all the right codes to wreak havoc with the heart
in your verse!
Another succinct and steamy poem, and I must say the senses sizzle!
Me: Usha!!! Thank you
It is good to see you back
and straightaway you are on track
it is certainly not words you lack
and for that alone you deserve a plaque.
Me:
Words I certainly don’t lack
I use too many I was told long back
But look, now I am on a different track
Saying it in four lines has become a knack
Very intense- loved it!
Me: Thank you Manju!
ummm….
this is hot !!!
Me: Dhiren, thanks!
passionate or what
Me: Lol
so well put, yet again!
so good, the hammering of the effect! 
Me: Thank you Onlooker.
Now that is passionate.
Me:
Shail,
Interesting one.
But if I knew the right codes to unlock padlocked chests, I would have robbed a bank and lived happily ever after. Yeah, different people, different strokes!
Regards,
Salil
Me: Salil, Wouldn’t I have guessed! Your last post was on how to make money in the stock market!!
intense!! eclectic!!! loved diz shail
Me: Wow! Thanks Sashu!
Wow! brief and concise, yet, tells all of the entire scene.
Wonderfully written, Shail.
Hands salute! ^_^
Miss ya! {{{hugs}}}
Me: Thanks Richette. Nice to see you here
Awesome Shail! You are amazing with words.. four lines can convey so much!!
Me: Wow, thanks IHM!
Passionate and sizzling hot might I add
Ushus is the only other one I know who captures it just so ..the agony and the ecstasy and you have done it so beautifully as well!wow!
it doesnt just sizzle …it makes that word seem obsolete
oh damn!lemme hunt for my romantic novels now…
Me: Oh oh oh!! Thanks Indy!!
You sharpen your craft
with each word that you write
as your thoughts clash in the clouds
and rain stormy insights tonight.
Those insights pour for
your readers delight
as the elements of your story dance
in our immediate sight
Thanks for sharing.
Me: Wow Bob in a poetic mood?? Thank you for those lines Bob!
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